请英语作文写得好的小可爱帮我提建议，改改作文，谢谢。写错的、要增加的都可以说。

更新时间2019-01-24 14:20:29

第21期

Tina’s Bedroom

Look at this bedroom! It is a really beautiful and tidy. The bedroom is Tina’s.

There is a big bed near the wall. The bed is purple. Her quilt and pillows are on her bed. They are white and purple. Her favorite toy bear is on the bed. There is a gift box on the quilt.

There is a nice desk under the window. The desk is purple, too. A lovely light is on the desk. A big bookcase is on the wall. Some books are in it.

Tina’s bedroom is very nice. Isn’t it?

第22期

My Parents

My parents love me very much, and I know them well. Now let me tell you some things about them.

First of all, my parents looks old. But I think they are nice. I know they are very busy and tired every day.

Then, let’s talk about my favorite food. My father likes meat. He eats them too much, but he is then. And he also likes cucumbers .He thinks they are good for his health. My mother likes tomatoes and potatoes. She likes oranges, too.

Finally, my parents don’t like doing sports. But sometimes, they play badminton and ping-pong with me. My father likes watching sports games on TV.

In a word, my parents isn’t best, but I think they are best.

帮我改一改。谢谢，改的时候写上第几期第几段，把那一段复制下，改好了发下，谢谢。

21期的是写Tina的房间，22期是写自己父母的爱好。

谢谢

21期第二句话，! It is a really beautiful and tidy.去掉 “a”整篇文章有些平铺直叙，可以适当加些过渡用的词

22期我觉得不用“first-then-finally”的结构比较好，因为文章的三点内容似乎没什么层次关系，第二段“but he is the n”好像缺了个词

My mother likes tomatoes and potatoes. She likes oranges, too. 这两句中间可以加上一句过渡一下，不然显得有些凑字数，可以说一下她经常给我做西红柿和土豆的食物

第三段开头可以加一句“Although they like food that good for their health”